Be My Queen, chapter two
Jan. 10th, 2014 05:52 pmRewriting any story means changing it: moving scenes to better places, making sequences more logical, giving better motivations, fixing plot holes, weaving in dangling bits. I understand that. But one of the scary parts for me is how the characters change. Now the change can give to story more emotion impact and the characters more logical motivations, but it still scares me every time a character (no matter how two dimensional) goes from being an Ice Princess with a weakness for the super rich to a loving daughter who wants to give her single father the first vacation he's had since before she was born and a devoted sister to her quasi brother, wanting him to be the best he can be, and a hard working woman who wants the best for her family owned business. All without losing her Ice Princess persona (even while giving her dark skin) or changing her part in the story.
Colt fell in love with Lion hard (Gestures) long before he let his feelings get involved the first time. I keep wonder if it's going to work or if I'll be stuck rewriting his part again, but I've discovered that Colt motivation for playing along with being wooed by Lion makes a lot more sense if Colt is in love with Lion and wants him to be happy with his star (Python) even if Colt can't have him. It really will be a different story. And a longer one. I'm at 13.9k and only about one fifth in (the other whole story is 35k).
Title: Be My Queen
Chapter: Two of twenty-four
Genre: romance, het, bi/trans
Rating: PG
Content: distress, friends, annoyances, working properly, texts, tape, Diego
Length: 1k
Summary: Lavender worries that her little problem will show.
Lavender rushed into a stall and lifted up her skirt. Who was she fooling? She yanked down the undergarments that held her bits in place and then took deep, shaky breaths.
( If he knew. )
Colt fell in love with Lion hard (Gestures) long before he let his feelings get involved the first time. I keep wonder if it's going to work or if I'll be stuck rewriting his part again, but I've discovered that Colt motivation for playing along with being wooed by Lion makes a lot more sense if Colt is in love with Lion and wants him to be happy with his star (Python) even if Colt can't have him. It really will be a different story. And a longer one. I'm at 13.9k and only about one fifth in (the other whole story is 35k).
Title: Be My Queen
Chapter: Two of twenty-four
Genre: romance, het, bi/trans
Rating: PG
Content: distress, friends, annoyances, working properly, texts, tape, Diego
Length: 1k
Summary: Lavender worries that her little problem will show.
Lavender rushed into a stall and lifted up her skirt. Who was she fooling? She yanked down the undergarments that held her bits in place and then took deep, shaky breaths.
( If he knew. )